Looking for a Beta

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Hey guys!

Just wondering if any of you could beta for my entry for the contest. I'm just having troubles making the characters sound like they're... from the Byzantine era. 

Oh, and uhm... I guess just as a warning, my entry's pretty long. Right now I'm sitting at around 3500 words, according to Word. Hehe, apparently one page in my mind is three pages on the computer.

And I guess I should also say which scene I'm doing. It's that scene in the garden with Eugenides and Dite. 

Thanks in advance. ^__^